Coop's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Narrative Flash Remake]

Hmm

Not doubting the skills that you have as a poet, I still think that you've chosen the wrong approach to it all. I've written short stories and with a little tweak from Flash and a soundtrack, I could submit these stories here. It doesn't work.

What I would do to address that issue however, is to get a microphone. Read the poems out how you feel that they should sound, which gives you so much more to present to people.

With the style of background a little shadow play would help to put the listener into a real mind of the setting and would deliver a whole new dimension or two to your skills as an artist.

Keep working at it, there are a lot of positives to draw from your writing skills.

[Review Request Club]

SprintT responds:

Thank you mate, and I am sure that if you look at my previous this is 1000% better XD
I am slowly working twards using my 2 microphones but that will come later (maybe in the next idk)

[Do I eat the...? STWPT]

Needs more

The animation is good, but the sound quality lets you down. It's a little too much static for my liking, plus it's way too short to be taken seriously - you could ahve made this as a bytesize flash, which would have looked great on the Front Page of Newgrounds, but other than that, I'd say you need to make a longer flash to be looked upon as a serious animator.

A few tweaks here and there, and suddenly this flash looks better - build some things around this song. Have a guy talking to his friend "So, I've got this audition for a part in a commercial tomorrow." "What have you gotta do?" *Dances* "Well, that's lame." "Yeah, but it pays better than your paper route :P"

That's just something off the cuff, so play about with it and I'll be happy to comment on the results.

[Review Request Club]

Lazyfeet responds:

Yeah, this would be ace on front page. I have a feeling Tom Fulp doesn't like me all too much. I am sorry about the length, as I said it had to be exactly 10 seconds long and I though, well the collabs over but I can still submit it. I'm very glad I did because of the great response.

But yeah, thank you for the kind words, it's always nice to have some constructive criticism.

[The Last Hour: Chapter 5]

Nice additions

I like the skip button that you added at the start and the animated logo that you've provided - it cuts out a lot of the useless crap that you didn't need in previous episodes.

Now there is the case that the episodes are too short, but we can work on that, I suppose. I think that it is nice to know that any user can come in at any episode and start watching with an understanding.

Given that all of the Anti-Christ's followers wear these necklaces, it is a little strange to see the Anti-Pope's drawn wrongly - it defies gravity in the chain loop.

Try zooming in and using a better tool - that way, the imagery of the whole project will look much more detailed and you will have much better results, which would be more deserving of the awards that you have won.

[Review Request Club]

Jaiba responds:

my last movie of the season. this will redeem my movies i hope
check out chapter 10. it will more than make up for the quality of this movie.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /457202

[The Last Hour: Chapter 4]

Slow improvement

I think that you need to reflect on what has happened in this series so far. It's enough quality to be put together into something which would better represent an episode. This is just a little background plot, with two people talking and the whole introduction being far longer than any of the episodes we have seen.

As for the blowing of your own trumpet in the introduction, you need to lay off that - let your own work speak for itself, as the series is hardly legendary. You're improving, but you're not a legend yet - that has to be earned from people saying it about you, not you saying it about yourself in the hope that others believe you.

I'd suggest that you do two major things, other than increasing the length of the flash - the first is to move the mic further from your mouth when voice acting - this will reduce quality loss in the sound. The other one is much more subtle. Make the eyes of the guy on the right level, as it looks horrible.

If you're worried about your grammar, I'd be happy to look over the script for you, so just send me a PM on that. Blaming your Irish ancestry is no excuse for poor grammar. Someone to look over it can help, as it gives you a fresh perspective on it.

And the comment about the 56kers still out there as an excuse for why you are trying to keep the filesize so small... I don't buy it. Put Episodes 1-5 into one and then 6-9 in the second. Maybe as much as 3 episodes could be made once you've thinned out all of the introductions, which bulks up the filesize to start with.

[Review Request Club]

Jaiba responds:

check out chapter 10. it will more than make up for the quality of this movie.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /457202

[like a duck (colour)]

Well...

What can I really say, except this concept is probably one of the most insane that I've ever seen - abstract to the max, with the theme of small creatures such as ducks and teddy bears.

I think that the piece of music hasn't ever conjured up such an image as this one before and kudos must be given, as you've grabbed this opportunity with both hands and carved yourself out a little niche.

Vibrant colour and a catchy tune have produced one of the true iunderdogs of this year.

[Review Request Club]

TheBoogley responds:

Thanks for the kind words, I like the idea of being a niche carver. :D

[Frankenstein Trailer]

Why want my mind out of the gutter?!

A great little flash, complete with all the wrong jokes that I never thought would occur in such a flash. You really need to get a female to voice over the part of Elizabeth, as your falsetto isn't the best in the world :P

Good animation and the use of Herman Munster (Or was it the classic Frankenstein's Monster from the original movie?) was well placed. Personally, I'd have gone for something more animated that the dying genre of animutation, as I'm sure that your drawing talents could ahve extended to something as wooden as Frankie's Monster.

[Review Request Club]

Rammer responds:

haha, thanks! that isn't my voice for Elizabeth, though - it's my friend, Tate's. :P Lisa didn't want to voice-act for Elizabeth. i think it's funny in itself that a guy is doing the voice, when the lines are professing love for a guy.

i just searched "frankenstein's monster" on google and found the best image :P i don't know where it was from.

as i said in previous responses, and in my author's comments, that last scene with the animutation was made at 1 in the morning on the day it was due. i couldn't have done anything better, really, considering the time.

thanks for the review.

[The Last Hour: Chapter 3]

Scene 3

I'm glad that you've moved another step towards learning how to use the features of Flash properly. It's a learning curve and I'm glad to see that you're on it.

The pre-loader looked better this time, with the solid effect enabling us to see what was going on, rather than having it blended into the background. Though there still needs to be some work done on the grammar, I'll accept that this was already published to Newgrounds when I first passed comment on the grammar.

The drawing needs some work and I'm sure that it will come in time - lip sync is your next task, as you've managed to manipulate the mouths of the characters to open and closed in elipses. Now look at yourself in the mirror and work out what different shapes you need to form basic words. Get a small collection of these shapes and you'll have your basic mouths, which you can add in the correct situation. Getting them to line up with the sound can be tricky, but you seem to be doing alright at present.

When you record the sounds, try to be a little further from the mic, as there was quite a bit of static on the NOOOOOOOOOOO! part. Either that or turn the mic sensitivity down a little.

Don't forget, it's not just the mouths of the people that move - they can change facial expression, some talk using hand gestures and some just make expansive shrugs. Not everyone does this, so a blend will help.

[Review Request Club]

Jaiba responds:

the facial movements and hand gestures have been suggested and we have presented basic levels of what you have just noted. if you check out chapter 5 you can note that we have implemented the facial gestures and such into the movie. and we have worked on our voice acting. we bought 5 dollar mics instead of those cheap crappy ones that come with the sony tape recorders. now we are moving on up into the higher end spectrum of flash animation.