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[Movement1 - chippy]

Short, but a good start

Well, aside from this being short and slightly eratic, it is a decent progression of photographs. I'd suggest that next time you double the frames and halve the length of pace between each shot.

The main problem was that when you arrived at the chippy, it hardly showed outside the place, and suddenly we were off the towpath and looking at a piece of battered cod.

Of course the other thing that you could do with this is to add drawings to the images and make some sort of comic strip out of it, perhaps...

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Bezman responds:

Doubling the frame rate would mean doubling the file size and I don't think folk would appreciate that.

You're right about the outside of the chippy not having been shown enough though - I could have slowed down there.

Adding drawings to a future one is something I'll probably experiment with.

Thanks for the review!

[Wegra Adventure 2]

Buh... (2)

We've still got the same problems here as in the first wegra adventure. What you need even more in this episode is a decently written plot - this barely had a coherent story, as it was just a few random plotlines thrown together and tied together with acts of violence.

Drawing needs to be improved by zooming in and using a slightly smaller drawing tool. You can use the eraser to round off the edges, making this whole section look better. See tutorials on drawing in Flash to improve this.

A decent vocal artist can be found in the Flash forums or the Voice Acting Club in the Clubs and Crews section of the NG BBS. This would bring you forward a giant step and if your drawing improves at the same rate, you'll be making decent flash in little time.

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Wegra responds:

I'm trying man.

[Wegra Adventures]

Buh...

Wow, that's amazingly poor animation and detail throughout. Try improving your drawing by zooming in and using a slightly smaller tool to draw your images with, as it's not working at the moment. The eraser is always a useful tool to round edges off better.

Voices are badly needed, as this sort of Speakonia style program just doesn't work well enough - it's too fast and half of the time, all you can hear is gibberish. Perhaps a bar with subtitles is what you would need, so that you can understand the narrator. Don't have Mario sound effects over the top of the Narrator, it sounds shite.

Look at some of the tutorials, they will help you learn how to animate and then you can submit decent looking movies to Newgrounds.

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Wegra responds:

Oooh Zooming in! I never thought of that. I'll try that in Wegra Adventure 4!

[Madness VS Predator 2]

But everybody dies...

It's a little simplistic and you really do need to source more sounds - the one you used for the spear penetrating flesh just sounds like a slowed down gunshot, which isn't what sharp objects entering soft squidgy parts should sound like - it's an explosion, which isn't close. The alien loop that you had wasn't the best either, as it had a bit of static on and caused problems when it had a gap in the loop.

The animation is decent, but needs more work to become one of the best animations out there - Predator almost goose-steps his way across the screen - his leg moves out, but then moves back in too far to complete the step. At least the plotline was well written and the music you chose sounded more like a Hammer House of Horrors film, than AVP, which was a nice change.

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jucama responds:

Thank you for your comments

[TANKMEN 1.5]

Love how it ties in

Jeff, you've certainly shown us that you're more than just a damn fine animator (Note there is no Homo-Erotic sub text there), because you can also write amazingly intricate plots from all angles.

I think that at some point I'd love to meet Skittles' parents and see some of the amazing adventures that they get up to in the present day. As Skittles is about to slot a communist, his mother tries to clean him up with a cat lick or something, for example.

That is assuming of course that he doesn't get killed between now and then by, say, a falling watch tower that got ploughed into by a tank trying to do a Back to the Future stunt.

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JohnnyUtah responds:

*bows

[one idea! by Zez Vaz]

Well,

Thank you for the surrealism displayed here in this random, yet quite catchy flash.

I was impressed with the use of colour and the whole extortion of the flying pig metaphor. It does have aspects that it is totally random and that the flash isn't really going anywhere and I would love to see this taken into something that encorporates the whole tune, rather than just a fast paced instrumental, but hey, it's a start.

The drawing of the guy is quite neat - no outlines and the whole effect of him was kind of Emo Manga. I think that the next way to take this is to add a face, as characters like that do look kind of freaky without facial features of any description. With your drawing style, I'd have thought they would present no trouble to you.

I look forward to future submissions.

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zezvaz responds:

thank you for your comment!
actually yes, i would love to pick this story idea up in the future and add more interesting looks to it!
that's no drawing skills at all! the character is actually me! i preformed those movements and asked mom to film me! i picked some essencial frames in photoshop and traced vectors in macromedia freehand! the only thing i draw was the hair and the reason it covers most of the face was to keep it simple and not having to make any facial feature and to add movement given by the wind! so that kinda explains it :)

thanks for the interest! i am working on new, more elaborate stuff right now, so i'll be posting soon!
take care!

[Pooh - It Had to be Done]

It's true

I'm glad that you did this - the abomination of a Disney corporate image that was once a decently useable image created by a wonderful author as a story for his child. The bigotry and capitalism has gone too far and finally someone has made a stand to stop it.

Unfortunately, it appears that someone has discovered that Pooh is a Were-Bear. Now he's going to come after everyone and go on some sort of Zombified killer rampage against all those who would conspire against his capitalist image.

Yes, so the audio quality has been problematic, but that's the only major issue. You've given a very good attempt at putting up some fine animation, but I'd reccomend that you zoom in more to get better control of the drawing tool, to round off the images more and tidy the whole picture up nicely.

If there's going to be a sequel, I must see it, as I'm really interested as to how this will play out.

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e-lusiv3yearold responds:

FINALLY SOMEONE KNOWS MY STRUGGLE AGAINST THE CAPITALISTIC IMAGERY OF WINNIE THE POOH.

Yours truly,
Clyde

[Zelda: The future of time]

Interesting Stuff

This flash hasn't got the best animation in the world, but it worked as highly servicable, which is good enough for me. The plotline was there, well written, but a little vague in places. Maybe you should have had Link do some talking, just to lighten the mood. I've never seen him as a character that just works well with slapstick.

Some of the animated areas need a little more work - for example, he looked as if it were a foregone conclusion about the drawbridge falling on him before the shadow had even started to cross him. From the rest of his portrayal in this, he's not as bright as to work out that the drawbridge is about to land on him - otherwise he'd have moved out of the way, yes?

If he could look a little more unconcious when he was being dragged through the city streets, it would be nice - maybe a black eye, since he's just had a few tonnes of oak dropped on his head, so make him look a little fed up, perhaps.

I'd look at the audio you used in places, it's a little low on quality and the effect isn't the one that I would want to put across to the viewer. A little less static would certainly help matters.

I'm looking forward to the second one and will lend my thoughts once it is released.

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PlatformSource responds:

awesome, i will :)