Well, let's start with the good - the piece has a good beat. I hear that all the way through the track, even to the point when I feel that it's affected my own heartbeat - I thought that only happened in nightclubs.
The bad thing is undoubtedly that the beat obscures the rest of the track, as opposed to complimenting it. Like someone in a choir shouting over the top of the soloist something like "Can you hear that? Aren't they good?!" Tone down the bass a little, to allow the rest of the track - the melody and counter melody especially, the chance to shine through of their own accord.
Don't get me wrong, this piece has potential in spades, but at eight and a half minutes, it needs to have a major change to allow it to fulfil this potential.
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