Well, this piece is awful from start to finish. I can't find a way to praise this in any way, shape or form.
The discord that you start with and repeat ad nauseum is horrible - in case you can't understand Latin, it's repeated until I feel sick. As for the rapping, I can't understand most of the words that you use, so printing the lyrics in the author's comments would be a good idea to start with.
Right, since I can't really comment on the lyrics, let's move on. There are two major breaks in the piece, when there is nothing coming out of the speakers. Fill these in with something, as any music is better than silence, unless you're pausing for a beat or two. This is pausing for great swathes, because I suspect you were trying to flesh out the time of the piece. If you're trying to flesh that out, try changing the music up a little, playing different notes, doing something with the beat, or making it a solo, for a change.
The second part, after the long break was just the same, but with the vocals reversed, if my ears tell me right. That might have been a good ideas, had I been able to understand the lyrics, but there was interference from the mic (get a better mic and perhaps a pop-guard as well) and also the rap was too quiet, being constantly drowned out by the droning of the music. The music is meant to back the vocals, not the other way around.
When you came back to the third part of the piece, it wasn't as long as the other two, but just seemed to be part 1 over and again, until you either pressed stop or just silenced it for the remainder of the track. I know it's a horrible thing to say, but the silence was probably the better component of this piece and without that, the rap would probably have sounded worse.
There is plenty to work on here, but don't give up. Prove this review wrong, make the most of another piece.
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