Only if the tank's real!
A nice little demo here, with a very well written script and added sound effects for the added levels of realism thrown in for good measure. I like it.
What I don't like is that the voiceover seems rushed - slow the pace down just a little. Take some time to calm yourself down before recording and if you're not entirely satisfied with the result, do it again. Perfection is a way of life and perfect is a legitimate goal in something like this. Take all day, just get the speed right.
If I were to say you did one thing wrong with the editing process, you didn't have the "NG T-Shirt appears" part done over Endless Handbag Loop, as that's exactly the music I'd have over my Newgrounds T-Shirt advert.
I'd also love to see someone animate it, possibly with someone ripping the piss out of Tom in a funny, but playful manner, if possible.
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