Interestingly funny
Though it kind of fell apart at the rap, this was a decent tune. Interesting lyrics and a 'new age' sound to the guitar.
I think that you need to make some sort of change to the tune so that the guitar fits the lyrics and the pause is actually filled with some music, rather than a solitary short note.
When it got to the rap, the voices were too loud and it became a little messy - work in the recording studio would certainly help this out.
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If you're going to do metal
Do it properly. I think that you've tried too hard to get metal guitar and not drag the rest of the setup with you - everything needs to be metal, not just the guitar. The start is great, when it actually sounds like Parisienne Walkways, but when it gets to where the legendary 30s note hold crops up, or even just before, you decided to go a little mad with the guitar and with the drums staying as they were, you kind of had a duel going, which wasn't what you needed.
The held note needed to be something special and the scales that you were playing there really didn't cut it for me. More practice and you'll get there, but that wasn't what we were after.
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Not bad
I think that the rhythm guitar is not given enough credit here and the lead guitar is just pissing about, to be brutally honest.
The rhythm and the drums carry the piece greatly, but the experimental quality of the lead guitar really does bring the track down, sadly. Perhaps sitting and listening to the piece before submitting will help. This would be the audio equivalent of proof reading and as a result, you'd be able to provide yourself with such an improvement, even before submission.
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A little OTT
It's not a bad track, but you need to consider the recording volume - I keep hearing this hissing noise in the background, which isn't good. Turning the volume of the recording down would certainly help this.
With the way that the lead guitar seems overpowering against the rhythm, you need to work on the balancing, as they should be in harmony, rather than the lead taking such a lead over the rhythm. That way, you cna pick up on the occasional duff note and work to resolve them.
It's good, but not quite there yet.
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Interesting piano
Not a bad track, but I think that more variation could be employed here - the two individual sounds of the rap and the piano are great, but more variation from the piano could certainly help to make the track more imposing.
The beat is well developed and the way that it keeps the track together is good. More development will be well employed to take the track further. I look forward to hearing it.
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Well since my friend moved away, I don't think this song will be remade anytime soon. If he had a decent mic, you would have already seen version 2, but alas that isn't the case. Thanks for the review.
A little too simple
Sorry, this is a decent foundation for an audio track, but I feel that it's just a little too simple - there's little variation and after a while, it does get very repetitive to people listening on a loop.
It's got a good beat that walks the track though and the piano is nice and even - plenty of hooks for a piano solo. The counter melody that comes in on the synthesised strings sounds alright, but I would seriously reccommend that you do something with it to bring the track onwards when you get the chance.
Still, a good start.
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At first I liked the synth strings, but after a while not so much. For the lyrical version I will change the chorus a bit, and maybe even change the foundation of the song completely.
One of the better things about Windows
Certainly a large step forward from the flash "Windows Noises" that I saw when I first signed up in 2004, but this is a great piece that's got quite a good selection of the Windows sounds, but I do think that you rely too much on outside sources for this tune, to totally call it Windows :P
A good use of some of the sound effects, to change the tone of the notes slightly and make it into a melody. Possibly too much variation, as this sounds like three separate tunes made from the three sound effects, joined up by the chorus. Perhaps integrating these three sounds together would have been a better idea...
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:D Thank you. I really do use too much drums in my tracks, it's true... Variation has always been my problem, I can't stand making songs which use the same melody which isn't the chorus more than twice, and then my song sounds like two or three seperate songs joined together :(. Ahh well, thanks for the 8 and for the tips :D.
Not bad
I can see this piece growing on me, much like how the jungle grows relentlessly and overwhelms everything else over the course of its life.
I like the sounds of the drums and the way that it carries the tune, along with the industrial sounding backing for the track - to be perfectly honest, we found sounds similar to that once, when I was a kid and we started banging sticks on lengths of plastic water pipe that were all different lengths :P If sounded good, but was not as refined as this, to be honest.
Perhaps some vocals - ululating voices from within the dense undergrowth would complete the track and would certainly give a much improved presence to the track as a whole.
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Thanks for the review :). I'm glad you enjoyed it. About adding vocals, maybe I should add some tribal voices or tiger roars. Aleady tried looking for some, and didn't find any. Ahh well, maybe I'll try looking harder and do an updated version of this track. Thanks again for the review :D.
Nice loop - more variation please
A good base for a decent track has been set, but the guitar sounds just seemed to go around in circles. Perhaps doing something more than that attempted solo at the end of the track would give you a lot more to play with - it's as if you had to cut the solo in its prime about halfway through, which was a real shame.
The drums need some sort of lift, as they can get a little flat - a bass solo would really help out, taking away from the snare sound of the rest of the drums.
It's got potential, so work on it and make it good :)
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Alright, I've made revision 1 so revision 2 will have a bass solo then probably.
Well, I've lost
Awesome entry to the contest - once again, you've proven that you are the pinnacle of voice acting talent in this world. Congratulations.
The punchline was well delivered and the backing music was really well added to make it sound so sinister. Perhaps a record scratching sound could be added when the customer comes in for his order, just to completely deflate the pirate's balloon?
What sort of setup are you using for this - the crisp efects of your vocie are incredible, with no static at all and the way it sounds is going to make a flash artist or two very happy beneficiaries over the next few weeks, I'm sure!
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