Coop's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Your Wall (WIP)]

Nice piece

To be honest, I'll start with a complaint. Don't write the lyrics like that, it's lazy. Write them out in full, so that we can read them along with the song. So the style of the vocalist is difficult to follow. In that case, make the lyrics easier to follow on the page.

Right, there's a good guitar and drum blend here, with decent, if difficult to understand lyrics. I think that you could take this further, but it would be some sort of guitar solo, that deserves to break up the song and allow people to get accustomed to something else, before the vocals come in. You've got similar with a bridge, but not a full blown solo, just yet.

I think that there is certainly promise for the piece. I'm not sure about the high pitched effect that you have got over the track, but each to their own, I suppose.

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StickyRemnant responds:

Ok, no problem, I'll write the lyrics like that from now on.

A guitar solo is planned for that bridge you mention. I save the main solo work for the other guitar player.

The effect you mention is a female choir. It's not exactly what I want but it's close.

Thanks again

[Strangled - Beholder bunn]

A requeim?

Well, the choir singing over the top of this track certainly brings home the pressing need for some sort of closure on a piece, but it's a case that there will be people looking around to try and find answers. As such, it conjures up imagery of Dan Brown's books, which is a slight at your own work. I'm sorry.

I think that the wispy sounding piece behind the choir was a masterstroke and that with the way that the pieces are starting to fall together, this could be the start of something bigger. Have you ever heard "Little Suzie" by Michael Jackson. have a listen to that and see what I mean by the start.

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Calamaistr responds:

I have heard little suzie yes, im not entirely sure what you mean by your first paragraph when youre referring to dan browns books; 'wich is a slight (?) at my own work (?)

I suggest you listen to the rest of the strangled score aswell. :)

Thanks for the review.

[[MC Crispy] - Real Times]

Upper class rapper

I love the way that you pulled yourself back out of the 'ghetto' language and then gave the shout out to all of your friends, because they all know that you don't really talk like this.

I think that you've paced the rap pretty well to the beat, but there is still work that needs to be done there - tone the music down slightly and concentrate on your voice. More practice is needed to work your way up to showing us that you can control your own pace - it varies too much through the track to work properly.

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chrisG755 responds:

thanks for the review.

Its true i may rap about living in the hood and shooting people.. but in freestyle rap its the easiest words that Rhyme. but then again i wasn't really brought up to swear and be an idiot and act like i own everything.. but, I'm not rich or posh either just middle class..

but anyway who wouldn't want posh sounding rapper?

anyway. i will definitely turn the music down. In my old raps with the bad mic i was told the beat was to quiet, but now i know where to put the sound level.
i also understand what you mean by working my pace. i need more focus.

-Chris from the HOOD (estate)

[Seashore Metropolis]

Nice sound

Well, it's not a bad effort, especially considering that you're leaning on the softer sounds of the piano, where it would be relatively easy to make use of the louder notes, which give more of an impact. Great use of synths at the end, but it could have looped better, to encorporate them into the start, perhaps so that the whole piece doesn't sound like it's got such an abrupt end to it. If you're not aiming for a loop, perhaps just make it a fade out, instead.

Additional variation would be a good way to take the track forward. Perhaps a light and happy sounding upbeat solo would do the trick, perhaps cutting down some of the other bits for time, just to give it a nice hand all in all.

I've heard some of your stuff around on Newgrounds before, it's clear that I will have to keep a watch out for more of your works.

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Sawdust responds:

Whoah, thanks then, man!

Anyway sure, why not, I'll try and get a solo in there. Maybe throw in a bass melody and drums. Glad you're looking out.

[Cries of the Tormented]

Quite Industrial sounding

Nice work, good use of the piano and a little soft on the actual cries, despite the strong start with them. I seriously thought that you were going to use more of the vocals for cries, screams and howls of anguished pain.

With the way that the beat compliments the piano, I also thought it could be an industrial track, as opposed to trance, since you're lacking in raw pace that this particular genre tends to crave, to keep the listeners in a trance.

I think it's a good track and that there will certainly be places and times that this could be used in the production of many pieces by Newgrounds users. Great stuff.

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Step responds:

Thanks for the review, Coop! I never thought this could be Industrial, since TBH, I don't know much about Industrial anyway :P. About the cries, screams and howls, I would add more, but the rest sounded like baby cries rather than monster cries xP. I doubt anyone will use it in a Flash, because I'm not one of the best artists here on NG, but whatever, thanks again for the review!

[Alien Rampage]

Slow buildup, decent results.

I think that there is certainly a case of some well executed constituent parts of this piece as a whole, but there is one main issue here. 10+ seconds of silence or too little sound makes for a very boring interlude, especially when the piece as a whole just peters out.

I think that as you've got into a very good position, you're showing that you've got some great synths and a lovely sense of combining a well worked beat with that, but it needs a little something else to make it more 'up there'. As for genre, I can see why you called it Miscellaneous, because you've got something that could be dance or trance and then again, it combines with things that could be considered General Rock.

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Birdinator99 responds:

Thanks for your detailed review! As I mentioned to the other reviewers below, that silence/slow build up exit was correctly identified as the weak part of the song, and I've definitely learned something about transitions. Thank you for the kind words!

[AF - Memories]

Good work

I think that there is certainly a ceiling to your works and you are approaching that at a rate. The main issue I have with this piece is that there is feedback when you get the speakers working too hard, so that there is a static fuzz over the top of the early running of the track.

There is some good ambience here, an aura of tranquillity and then again, of movement, which could be brought on by the fast melody over the counter melody. Personally, I'm not sure if it works, so it might be something that needs to be slowed down just a little to go for the tranquil, or something else as the counter melody to provide the emphasis for the speed.

[Review Request Club]

[As A Bird (WIP)]

Drummer let you down

Not a bad track, but the drummer needs lessons, because that freestyle bollocks in the background kept no beat to the rest of you. If he's going to do that, you guys need to start with it and let the drummer call the shots and stick with it, as opposed to telling him to follow you and watching him go more abstract than Pablo Picasso.

I think that there is a sitiation where the guitar, vocals and keyboards is a brilliant combination, sort of how the Pet Shop boys could have been if they'd have had the talent.

Good lyrics, more practice required to get the band unity in it and finally consider getting a bassist, just to add more impetus to the track.

[Review Request Club]

StickyRemnant responds:

Haha, the drums are done by me on this one, I guess I should stick to guitar! I had something in mind similar to "There Goes The Fear" by the Doves" I think it'd work in theory but Im not the best on drums.

As for bass, there is a bass there. I think I must need some monitors because people keep saying that they can never hear the basslines in my tracks - probably due to me mastering with headphones (which are pretty bassy)

I'll redo the drums. Cheers for the review

[The City of Endless Light]

Which city would this be

I'm trying to picture which city on Earth this could be - Obviously not New York, as it's already got a few of its own, while the Classical Genre doesn't really fit with modern cities like there are in America. Sydney is a possibility, with the harbour bridge and the Opera House, but possibly a little too modern again. I'm ruling out place like Tokyo and I think this has got to be heading for Europe, with places like Berlin, Munich, Paris and London.

I think that there is certainly a good background here for a piece that would suit being attached to a piece of time lapse photography of one or another of these cities, without the lights going out at all during this time.

The higher notes here in this piece could be reminiscent of the snows that have hit recently, so I can see places that are highly suited to this, especially as the lights increase even more, with the snow to reflect them back into the sky.

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