Not bad
Good plot, well developed (but slightly too short) fight scenes and a good degree of mystery, setting the piece up for the next episode.
I think that this is a nice piece that certainly a good showcase at how you are with manipulating sprites, but that woman had truly massive thighs - is that really necessary? Probably not your decision, but just an observation I thought I'd share.
When you come to the end of the piece, the fade to a complete black screen needs to be addressed urgently - some sort of credits, or a replay button tend to be the favourite options of choice for flash, to be honest. Perhaps you can experiment with that, or just loop it, which I would think is a bit of a cop-out.
Still, a nice piece, that shows off your skills - the addition of voice acting would be a nice touch, but not entirely necessary, since the subtitles worked, despite them jumping around the screen a lot - personally, I would have preferred a bar at the base of the screen, so the reader doesn't have to concentrate too much to enjoy the piece.
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