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[ZikiZaki stick fight]

Not much to say, really

The filesize of this movie says it all, really. I have text documents on my computer that are larger and better quality than this piece.

There is little animation to speak of and no plot seemed evident - it's really difficult to get into some sort of plot in a flash that short.

You need to work on your animation skills, giving them a chance to actually be seen, so move the arms and legs of the characters, possibly taking some inspiration from such good stick fight movies as Xiao Xiao, where the characters run around and do crazy flips etc, combined with some spectacular moves.

A music track could help, along with the inception of perhaps a voice or two, for these characters, but maybe that is getting a little ahead of us.

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killerchai responds:

Im doing this alone and this is my first flash i just learned how to slow it down and how to put music i cant get voices on and i added words last so i didnt know if you could see them or not.

[Clockday09 Pancakes]

Pancakes are good

While I do not doubt the abilities of pancakes to impress and detract from the making of quality flash movies, this is no excuse *slams fist onto table*

I demand that you spend some time making the proper flash submission for clock day and that you submit it when it is completed. Furthermore, you will require some plot line and of course some better drawing and animation!

Naturally, I may be willing to be more lenient if you were to, say, walk away from the pancakes in the hope that nobody should eat them in your absence.

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DrSevenSeizeMD responds:

You can have some pancakes too, we share!

[[ClockDay09] Running NG]

Kill Orange Again!

What a great little feature, that I can just sit there and abuse for days at a time. I love the way that you've produced a well thought out piece of animation, using the blueprints of Stamper and Tom from the house drawn models that have been a part of this site for a while now. I love the way that Oranges' face shattered and the punchline from Strawberry about him at the end.

A good plot, worked out well, as for today only, the Web Slaves will dedicate themselves to a collection page for this holiday and promoting the welfare of clocks around the world. Good Job.

I just wish that Tom had been restrained by a few of the clocks, or there had been evidence of a collaboration with Wade, causing Tom & Stamper to become enslaved by the Clock Crew.

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[Sad Link]

Too short

A silly little gag that required more depth to it all - perhaps more buildup will make this flash have more staying power and a much more improved sense of completion when the punchline is delivered.

The drawing style isn't bad, but the animation is nothing to write home about - I'd have concentrated more on manipulating the piece, to give more life to the three characters. The tweens are poor, as it's just a cut out of Zelda going down on Mario and the little animation of Mario moving his head back isn't the best that you can produce, I'm sure. Perhaps Link needs to become angry and do something stupid, like butcher Mario and Zelda for punishment.

It's got a few things that it can utilise to become a good flash, but you're not quite there yet.

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J0hnnyR0tt3n responds:

Thank you, I wasn't really expecting much of this flash, it was just something I was messing around with, I just got a crappy little drawing tablet so I figured I would test it out. I am going to college for animation soon so I expect to learn a lot more, not just about flash but about animation in general.

[The Blues]

Nice audio

I think that this is a pretty decent adaptation of the audio that you found - a great idea to have the mother's stresses showing through after the kid has played his harmonica almost non-stop since his birthday.

The animation could use a little work, particularly with the lip-sync, as the harmonica is a little out of time in places. I'd say that with work, this could be expanded into a nice series, as it's a niche that I've not seen explored before in the thousands of movies that I've seen over my time here.

Keep working on it, you've got potential.

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[Castle Crashing The Clay]

Way too short

I know it's going to be brutally honest of me, but the submissions that you've made are just way too short, even for inclusion in a collaboration. I know that when collabs are being made, they need to have some semblance of a plot lone and this is the major reason that people would see fit to cut your work before publishing the piece.

Now, don't be disheartened - you've got an ability for stop-motion claymation. Perhaps spending more time working out what the characters are going to do and then taking them through the paces like you've done here. This will certainly help you out.

A little more work on the modelling of the castle crashers themselves could also be used, which will make the end result of the animation look better. If you could take some stills of the castle crasher as well, you'd be able to submit them to the Art portal for more tips on your sculpting.

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[Ozy's Masterstroke]

Funny... very funny

I think that this was reasonably well thought out, but it does have room for more with the jokes and the plot exposition. I like that Adrian Veidt had some hand in Michael Jackson's death and the way the you mirrored the Comedian with Billy Mays. I'm sure you could have fit Farrah Fawcett in there as well, making her John Osterman's ex-girlfriend and creating the fact that rough anal sex with him gave her Anal Cancer, for example?

The outfit that you gave Dr. Manhattan could have used a little more work, as it's not quite up to what was used in the movie. Also, for me the mask that you had for Rorschach was too animate - his expression didn't change that quickly or violently, like some sort of screensaver.

I liked the easter egg and I think it's a poorly drawn method of showing dislike for Harry Potter. Perhaps the music could have been quietened down a little for the thrash metal, but other than that, it's funny again.

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zappawadda responds:

I was thinking of mirroring Farrah Fawcett in some way, but to be honest I didn't know who she was until she died. Then two hours later my attention shifted to MJ.

The Rorschach mask was only meant to be on screen for a short time, but I agree, it needs more work.

Thanks for the thorough review!

[Postman Tim Door No. 2]

Exquisite punchline

Beautifully delivered, this piece is well thought through and animated. The build up of animosity between the postman and the dog is rather a cliché, but it does work well, especially in the Tom & Jerry sense, when the slapstick takes on a more sinister twist.

The houses look a little weird when Tim stands looking down the garden and Rumbles starts running at him, but then again, it may just be a matter of perspective. I look forward to what Tim has to deal with at Door number 3.

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