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[small war]

Needs some work

Let's start with the basics - You need to work on the spelling, as there are plenty of errors here. Weapons are semi-automatic (not simi) and others besides. You can download spell checkers for free, so have a look and give one of those a shot. Failing that, you can download a dictionary for Firefox and use that one, if you need to ;)

Subtitles tend to look better if they are within a bar at the bottom of the screen - yours tend to look a little out of focus, which is perhaps a problem from the video converter software.

The animation isn't that bad and I'd certainly like the look of seeing this taken further, because the ending looked a little abrupt. It can be longer and give us more of a cliffhanger. Perhaps more research, by watching things like Madness and XiaoXiao would help your productions further.

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m103904 responds:

thanks i rushed w the spelling and the words were made in paint. the movie was made w pivot.

[Otakuhell At Animefest 09]

What a tune!

Certainly the best rendition of "Smells Like Teen Spirit" that I've ever heard - kudos to you for dredging this one up.

With the way that you've taken this piece of music, I'd have expected a little more from this Frame-by-Frame animation - you don't really get much bang for your buck with what you could have expected.

The colourscheme was simple and effective, but I really did have a lot of trouble working out what this flash was trying to say in all essence.

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[Mac, PC, and a Hedgehog]

Bankrupting Microsoft? Way to go.

Well, I know both a person called 'Mac' and one called 'PC' Both nicknames of theirs, but they still count :P

Right, this isn't a bad cartoon for the humour value - I'm not so sure about the animation as it looks crudely drawn, at best. Perhaps zooming in on the image you're drawing will give you greater control and then you can make a better looking picture to finish the cartoon off.

The other thing I will advise about is lip-syncing - the mouths change size too much - forget the shape that they make for a second or two, as when the size of the mouth changes so radically that it gets bigger than the face it's on, you've made a mistake.

Keeping the proportions right will help, but not only on that aspect - the bullet hole will be smaller than what you used and it would look a less basic colourscheme than you chose. Perhaps when sonic activates his MobianWare, it would have removed the wound itself?

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RecD responds:

yeah, you're right. I promise the next one will be better!

[Watchmen Rorschach]

Continuity errors

Not a bad take on the Watchmen Grapic Novel and movie, but there are continuity errors that could do with being addressed over the course of the movie - Rorschach never called Jacobi by his first name, only by Moloch (save for when he addressed him as all of his alternate names). Also, he called himself by his Walter Kovacs name when he said that he died that night, with Rorschach taking over from then. It's quite a big difference, with the way it plays out in the film.

I think that the drawing style is quite nice - more cartoon like than even the Graphic Novel, but it seems to work. Perhaps with the animation, you need to make it more like the characters are moving, particularly the dogs, which just seem like a layer that moves over the top of another.

Still, it's a good piece, but with the way that you've chosen these scenes from the film, perhaps you could have had the talk with the psychiatrist and the Rorschach blot tests for the two of them.

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PyroSpriteProduction responds:

Thanks for the criticism, but you are wrong about the Jacobi thing.He says
"good evening Jacobi,got your note,been wondering why you wanted to see me"

[Professor Fucking Layton]

Make this into a series

I love the way that you've made this piece - it's a great piece of animation and the plot, while completely disjointed is brilliant. Now you can take this on and make it into a movie with mini games. The way that the piece pans out, you can have the movie go on and whenever Professor Layton gets given a puzzle, you have to solve it before continuing with the mystery. How does that sound?

The drawing style is pretty cool, especially when you zoom out and the characters become cyclopses, which is a nice touch. I'd love to see you take this further and can't wait to see further submissions from you :)

Perhaps put subtitles in and make them in a uniform place - moving them around the screen distracts the viewer from the task at hand, which is watching the movie and potentially solving the puzzles.

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backwardcompatible responds:

You're fucking awesome.
Thanks for the feedback, i might just do this...

[Interrogation]

Could use subtitles

It's not a bad piece, but the audio quality was a little sucky and there wasn't really enough animation for my liking, but it's got potential.

Perhaps ask your sister to stay a little further away from the microphone when she does her lines - it gives a little static overtone when she speaks.

There could be a little more animation, as it's just a head moving, which is quite basic. Perhaps fade something into the background, like the detail of the interrogation cell - the light will give off enough effect for you to put some greys in there, so make the most of it.

Hand drawing is always good as well - the character looks weird with the eyes being different sizes and lopsided, so play to that as it is, just make it look a little more normal. You'll get there, but making the guy look like a complete freak isn't the way to go - a few more subtle things would help, so straighten the head up a little, make the eyes more uniform sized and as the tweaks become more subtle, you'll find that they have more impact.

Finally, adding a subtitle bar would really help you - I could understand about 1 word in 10, which is a real shame.

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bloodclots99 responds:

aha, well the real reason i posted this animation was to see what tips people would give me and im currently working on one with a better mic and lots of animation, thanks for the tips man its helpful

[Chibi Theatre 1]

Hmm...

It's not bad, but it could do with a few more bits and pieces, just to develop the animation a bit further.

Perhaps the use of shapes is a good base to start with for the drawing of the chibi, but I'm not sure if you should leave them like that - get the drawing tools and fill in the gaps between the ellipses, as it will make the imagery look so much more advanced.

Perhaps taking a little more time with the football would be the next thing, as the laces shouldn't be that long and the ball should end in points, with hoops around either end. These small details will make the world of difference.

Then the plot - perhaps the fire chibi could have run away, or the greenish one could have tried in vain to dive for cover. I'm sure that as this was just a pilot, you'll be giving a more in depth plot to future episodes.

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PikaRobo responds:

I'll try to improve. As for the plot the fire guy DID run away at the very end of the video, he just dissapeared for a split second and that was by complete accident. I said in my description I couldn't fix it. The football part was probably just a plothole, but thanks to you bringing that up I will no doubt explain that in future episodes (As to why he didn't just throw the thing away or why the fire one didn't die as well.) I could probably explain that right now, but I don't want to ruin it on just a feedback response. ;)