Cutting edge satire
I can certainly see this being a highly topical news item from back in the days when Google was a massive company that just bought up everything that resembled a rival, much like Microsoft before it (Now owned by Google) and various other insidious companies.
I love the way that you've shown us a Mario-style animation that has very limited playability and an almost non-existent variation style. Will this be released on PS3 in the near future?
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Hopefully.
A wonderful way of thinking
I love this piece for the humour and for the fact that the logic is something that you can barely argue with. The introduction was funny, if a little crude, talking about how everything for this piece was either begged, borrowed or stolen, enabling you to make such savings and pass them on to the consumer.
With some of the points that you make for the actual logic, I would like to bring the following to your attention:
1) The human bladder is much like a balloon - while strong enough to contain itself, it will grow and shrink with direct correlation to the amount of fluid contained within. Have you considered kidney stones could be causing such a blockage. How did it go with your doctor?
2) Ninja Powers = The One. I love this concept, though you should surely have considered that there is one more thing to consider about Ninjas - they are invisible against a black screen. Perhaps consider telling us all that since the ninjas could not be seen, you have painted them in bright colours, to make them instantly recognisable.
3) Cowboys. One thing greater than cowboys would be Chuck Norris, since he owns most things internet. Perhaps a little aside there would have just dragged this on a little further for even more laughs. Say 40 / 30 / 17 / 13, perhaps?
With regards to the animation, I would suggest that you do something to work on the background around the characters - I clearly saw the boxes around everything, which was a shame - you've got some good animation techniques, it would be a shame to spoil them with something like that.
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Chuck Norris is a cowboy ninja multi classer. Everyone knows that.
Could have used a preloader.
Not a bad piece, but it lacked interpretation in places, I'm afraid. I think that the switch from the "Tortuga Tavern" to the "Choke & Puke" was poor, but could be vastly improved - try something like having the face of the pirate talking and then the cutaway scenes that show the things like "the shameful end at the end of the plank". Perhaps that one could have been interpreted as a guy walking the plank, instead.
I'd have made the guy look like a Pirate for that and when it came to the shop scene, I'd have cut from the pirate face (the guy talking for most of the voice over) to the normal guy, who now doesn't have pirate peripherals. When you cut from the pirate to him, he should just be an average Joe and then the joke really hits home.
Like all good comedy, the secret is great timing.
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I know its bad is alot of places. I was really rushed in the end because my comp tried its hardest to completely destroy the cartoon. I think in reality trying to make an animation in 4 days when I'm still new at this might have been a dumb idea.
Not bad
A few spelling errors crept into the piece at strip 14, but by then, the story had all but played itself out. Executioner, protest and "too much of the public" were the ones that I spotted. Typing the manuscript in MS Word and running it by a spell checker would sort these, but I would urge you to proof read, before publication.
A nicely drawn piece, that could have used a splash or two of colour, just to give a little more life to it - not necessarily totally coloured in, but a few pastel shades in the right places could have really brought the story to life.
Please, make more of these, they look very nice and it seemed like a story that I coul;d actually get into, despite it being Manga, which I've never liked. It reminds me a little of the game system from White Wolf - Exalted. The supernatural beings that channel essence to do incredible things that seem like magic to the mortal man. Perhaps it could be a direction used in this story?
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Could be. Probably won't be. Glad you liked it. I am lazy though, so more might never happen.
Could use some colour
I like the way this sounds, though I'm not sure about the look of it all - colouring and shading needs to be employed to make this piece much more interesting. I like the way that you've put the little kid in and the way his eyes open in excited wonderment, but when you hear that the voice over is talking about colours, you don't need to add just one bit of red - we're not watching Schindler's List, after all.
Something didn't look quite right about the pirate narrator's chin - it didn't seem to move naturally for me and if you could fix that, I'd certainly see you talking to legolas-969 with a view to making this into a more permanent series.
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Well its not to say I wouldn't do more to make it better, like shading, and refining the animation. But it is time sensitive. I sort of ran out of time. Thanks for the critique though.
Needs a lot more
You've given us a demo on lip syncing here. It's not really animation, just by making the lips move - you're trying to cash in on Egoraptor's brilliant voice piece and have truly failed to do it justice.
The stars are given for the fact that you've actually drawn a pretty decent character, added a decent looking pre-loader and have actually synced up the voices pretty well to what little movement you put in the piece.
Try putting some more effort in - make the background more detailed - there's sounds of the sea, so why not put some moving sea in there - no sea is ever as calm as you've drawn it. Have the two backgrounds change and make the characters look at least slightly different - I don't just mean give them a new hair style either.
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Very good
The animation is great - you've captured the essence of a good series in a few easy moves, providing a great looking piece overall. I think that with the way you've set your stall out for this, it's well worth me looking back at previousm episodes in the series now.
You could use some work with your voice actors - I'd recommend that you download Audacity and get the mic settings turned up - it's too quiet, which you've tried to compensate for, but it only gives you static. Some equalisation work should help there, which Audacity can do. Either that, or buy a better mic.
The combats looked good, except when the bats were deployed - they could have done more moves than just the basic slashing that they did. Perhaps they would have performed better against the archers?
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Thank you very much for your review
It's funny you mention Audacity because I did use that program this time around, I plan to for movies to come.
I took your advice and tried what you suggested and I see what you mean. But I know it's a mic issue, it's an ongoing problem. But I do intend on getting a new better one for all oncoming movies.
I'm glad you enjoyed the fight scenes. I do apologized for the lack of entertainment I put into the bats. I will put them to better use next time.
Once again thank you for your review, it has been very helpful and knowledge.
"This time we are sure she's a woman, right Kiff?"
A very nice piece, showing a very wide range of people that will partake of the DDR machines in arcades. I think you missed one class of them out, as the London meet did prove - drunks. People that walk past the machine stating "I'll have to be very drunk before I try one of those things out" are hilarious when they've had a few and then make a beeline for the game, especially their lack of coordination.
I think that it's a well animated piece and the drawing style, while quite vague and not very detailed certainly does the job for conveying the emotions felt in this happy piece. I'd suggest that you take a scene or two from behind the machine, so that you can see the screen - make some sort of video on the right console, so when there's one player, the lead singer from the band can come in and do the "Jumping all around" line.
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Rather!
What a jolly fine romp this is - the social side of certain early Transformers. Since you've gone all English with this one, what would this chap's name have been? Prime Minister?
Regardless of that, you've delivered a wonderfully attentive piece, that shows off a propensity to pay attentions to details, which I for one find brilliantly complimentary to your pieces. From things like the sneeze accruing on the windscreen, to the shoe flying overhead as the chap faints, it's got that all the way through.
Two questions - 1) Why didn't you animate a windscreen wiper for the transformer? He could surely do with a clean windscreen. 2) Did you make the transformer out of the constituent parts for the vehicle or vice versa?
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1. good god man , what did I do.
2.i made the car first, and cut it apart, but there was obviously alot of cheating involved...that damn robot has WAY more mass than a model t.
Damn you Kanye!
Great stuff - a very nice little animation that shows off what we'd all be like if we got a chance to win a Newgrounds Tank award. It makes me wish that I'd done something with the beans can that I got Tom to present me with in London :P
Nice animation style - you really do put a lot of detail into the lips of characters, don't you?
I think that it could have a little more with the background animation - perhaps put some basic facial features in the crowd and go from there. Possibly dome flashes from cameras, so perhaps some cameras or phones in the audience, capturing the images.
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