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[Ogre & The Witch]

Hmm... I'm not sure

Really and truly, this one has me stumped. It might be the child-like quality of the drawing that you've animated and the cross-overs with the rest of the piece, where there is actual animation and some basic techniques (the liquid from the bottle, the product of the brew morphing, that sort of thing), but I feel that you've been let down in a way by this.

Do not despair, perhaps a little touching up work can be done, before animating - keep the textured look to the drawing, that works well, but perhaps consider trying to re-draw some of the images, like one of the witches' faces had a smudge over the eyes and those sorts of things take away from the presentation of the piece as a whole.

I think that the writing is pretty good and the way you left it with the wizard character looking in a crystal ball could seem like a cliff hanger, though maybe have a line in there for him, as opposed to leaving it completely open ended, with part of the script that some people might miss.

Certainly worth developing and perhaps you'll be able to make more of a production of it, for future episodes. I look forward to it.

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ToonCastleTV responds:

Cool man good advice. Altho I definitely won't be touchingup the production or making future episodes. wouldn't of even of made this if i didnt have to (school project) But I will add a line by the Wizard, and play off the ending a bit :) Good advice. Ty! ^^

edited: tried it out and it just didnt seem right =(

[To Be Mad!]

Not the best plot

So it's based around poor interpretation of a French song, making it sound incredibly homosexual, while taking a Madness theme to base yourself around.

I did quite like the pun substituting the gun for the penis and that was probably the best part of the entire piece. Where it starts to fall apart is the length and the way that the animation subtly changes through the piece - you start with very little facial emotion shown for the characters and nearer the end, making him lip-sync is just a step too far, because if he'd have been doing it from the start, you'd have established continuity.

To top it all off, you had a surreal ending. Probably the best way this could have ended, when all's said and done, but you still have a way to go. The animation is a little accomplished, but you need better writing to exploit your talents better.

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[Pico's Penny Prank]

Quite good

An old joke, given an NG twist. Perhaps Pico could have actually run the kid over in the ice cream truck, using the wipers to get the gore off the front, showing the grinning visage of Pico in all of his malevolent glory. Of course, the hand should remain grasping the coin on the floor, as this is some sort of morbid comedy convention.

A good use of music and sound, as you've backed up a good concept well here, producing something that is funny, well animated and overall worthy of Pico day. I hope that Tom watched this, as it's the sort of thing that Pico Day thrives on - will you be making more flash like this for other Newgrounds Themed Days? I'd love to see your take on Madness Day or even the mighty Clock Day.

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ToonCastleTV responds:

I've made 2 madness flashes previously, a lockday one and 2 clock day ones previously bud. I'm going to be soon releasing a longer more explicit version of this flash and that idea is awesome XD thanks bro!

[Life in Magicka]

A little short

It's quite funny, I'll give you that, but then there would appear to be so much more you can make of this - the game is an untapped resource of jokes, so throw the whole idea out there and give us something to get out teeth into jokes wise.

The laughing off camera sounded to me like someone crying, so perhaps you need to alter that slightly to get the sound right, before everything else follows. On top of that, a little more buildup for the gag would have been a good idea, perhaps some "magical" sound effects off screen and a blinding flash, just before the rock strikes and the joke comes out.

I think the blue and green guys could have been pictured standing there at the end and high fiving, while the yellow one leans in and says "Not bad, but how do you know he got the joke?" as green and blue fall about laughing.

I'd like to see more Magicka based jokes and flash, so keep up the good work.

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[The Sugar Claws: II-VII]

Nice writing

Hmm, the buildup is quite nice, but a little short, even for some sort of comic book, as you style them - I think that you could double the number of panels and not have it being too long. The size is not a problem, allowing for you to expand the piece, without adversely affecting it all.

The writing has never been a problem for all of your pieces and you're fully capable of taking this from strength to strength. I love the colour scheme that you've used and with the way that it's panned out, I can see myself getting into the tale. Perhaps a little bit more would be a nice way to take it, as opposed to her coming home, going almost straight to bed and not really engaging much, allowing us to get attached to the character.

I wouldn't have been swearing at her if I was a parent or guardian, but perhaps that's a dynamic there that needs to be explored in future episodes? You've certainly made him a sinister character though and I'm curious about him.

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Celx-Requin responds:

Yeah the story is significantly shorter/tighter than "Cooljaw", part of this is because the art takes longer to do, and the other part is because I feel the narrative is stronger.

Hopefully as the story unfolds people will be able to get a better feel for the characters, and the world they inhabit.

All I will say is by the end of the comic people will hate me, and I will be ostracized from my circle of friends should they ever read it...

Thanks,
- Celx

[Portal Hoppin']

Awesome concept

Well, the way this turned out was funnier than I expected. Some great writing and awesome voices, combined with the fact that you've drawn the guys in such a way that they're recognisable, yet instantly lampooned.

As far as the voices were concerned, I'd have done a minor tweak / swap. liljim is the Englishman, so surely he should have had the posh, snobby voice that you gave to Wade and given him something deeper, yet still nerdy and indicative of someone obsessed with photography and flashlights.

I think that as a writer, judging by FBIpolux' post from the NG Office on Pico Day itself, there should have been a cut-scene at the end, when it cuts back to NGHQ and Mike looks around from his computer, sees everyone with bandages and so forth, before commenting "What the hell happened to you?"

Awesome stuff, please give us a sequel, because they're going to have to rebuild.

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[Officeplankton Striptease]

Simple and effective

Silent comedy has always been a winner, even in the early days of the silver screen, so why should it stop now? The trick has always been to keep the jokes modern and the reason that this one works so well it the originality. T

he striptease for the computer nerd is a great start and as they are probably one of the most sexually frustrated cliques of society, the reaction would most probably be different in real life, but that just adds to the humour.

I love the drawing style and it conveys a funny and quirky animation, though I was never sure about the teeth - on the guys, it's not that much of an issue, but on the girls, the teeth with massive gaps just looks horrendously out of place. It's not enough to put me off watching the rest of these submissions, but it's something to maybe consider.

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[Mario slayer the return]

I've seen better

Well, there were a few bits and pieces here that made me laugh, a few that made me cringe. A few tweaks here and there should solve most of these issues though:

When the preloader starts, don't have the music play - it's quite loud and while it helps to set the scene for the piece, it's best not to have it play until the menu.

With some of the sprite manipulations, I'd suggest that you spend a little more time in getting the sprites of the right size - blowing them up makes the piece look slightly ridiculous and for example when Mario slides through the turtles, why can't you have the shell lying on the floor, instead of just rotating them onto their backs?

When there is conversation, I've never been a fan of subtitles, as they can distract. Perhaps get a voice actor in and the subtitles can tie into what is being said at the time.

In the final fight with Zero, when Mario wins, he flips a block up and drops it onto Zero, who had ample time to move. Doing something there, perhaps making the death a little quicker would assist the flow?

It was good to see that you did three endings and that certainly helps to drag the piece out for a little longer and to anyone reading this review, I'd certainly recommend that they try all three endings, as they are all different and there is some fun thrown in there as well. This piece has definite potential and I'd like to see more of it, if you can smooth out some of the issues.

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Figter responds:

You bring up some good points coop.
About the preloader music, it was the first time i ever tried to do that kind of thing and wanted to see if it would work out.

About the sprites..well that is a good question actually, im not exactly sure what was going trought my mind back there..

I never really liked using voice acting, i tried it but never used it in anything that i published, mayby i should give it another shot.

The final fight with zero, yes i know it was kind of ridicoulous and not so effortable but it was the last parts of the flash and my mind wanderd away, making me wanting to get it done as fast as i could wich i regret.

Thanks coop you made good points that i most certanly will use in the case of another mario related flash submission.

[The Bat Cave]

Only natural

A short and sweet flash, showing exactly what you'd do if you had the resources at your disposal, like Bruce Wayne. I mean he gets all the girls, but being able to watch whatever porn you want when you want would be a nice perk as well.

Good drawing style and the buildup through the opening of the cartoon is fantastic. It sets a really nice scene and you're lead to believe something really epic is going to happen, then you see a brief spread of a few weird and wonderful images that makes the joke really happen.

I think that to make it slightly better, I'd have shown those images across his monitors, so that it gives the impression of Batman looking at 10+ screens of wall-to-wall porn. Possibly throw a Goatse in there as well, since we had some of the more disturbing images up there anyway.

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mungo-raginbrain responds:

thanks for the detailed review man! the only reason i didnt show the porn all across the monitors in the shot before was because i wanted it to be a surprise. maybe the last quick shot of porn could have been a full spread of all the monitors though

[Demon Tales Ep1 "Pilot"]

Great setting

Okay, so some of the drawings were a little "off", with the way that the zombie at the end looked strangely angular, as if it were out of Minecraft, while the rest of the animation seemed smooth and free flowing, but I can't fault it all that much, as this is a fantastic start to the piece.

You've laid out a decent foundation for something that could run and run, as there is no end in sight for this take, more a beginning and we don't know quite how long that will take you to get over to what might be an end, or even a red herring.

Certainly deserving of an award, but some issues have cropped up that might need a little attention - the way that some of the musical cues contrast so much, they might need a little more "filler time", to allow the dark and mysterious one to fade out, before the comparatively "light and airy" one comes in for the next scene.

The character development looks good, though with the script writing, you would develop the character quicker with more dialogue, as opposed to monologue. Get him some people to talk to and that should get the viewer more interested in the fate of the character, as they build a rapport with him.

Very positive start, I expect good things from this series.

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