I had to stop listening
Dear god, it gets worse.
The guitar doesn't carry a tune and the vocalist can't sing, so what are you thinking with trying to make a song out of this?! Two wrongs don't make a right and I don't care if it is a joke, because I'm not laughing either way.
It's not Heavy Metal, so I'd suggest that you re brand it into something like pop, since it's got a snivelling whine of the Boy band about it.
Then we get the rock part, which is almost as bad, if not worse. The lead singer has some real issues with how close he gets to the mic - tie him up, so he doesn't get closer than maybe a foot from the mic, as it would help a load with the song. Giving him some decent material to work with might help as well, but that's only maybe, as I'm not sure if his talent would be appreciated elsewhere.
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