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[Ghouls]

Good stuff

Quite a random little skit, but I can see the plot being about this misunderstood, if not entirely friendly little ghost. The only similarity to characters like Casper end with the look of the thing, but it works well, with a little malicious mischief thrown in there for good measure.

Some of the faces you've drawn look really weird, especially the nose of the kid who tried to throw the toilet paper, but got his own comeuppance. I liked that touch, I might have to use it myself against trick or treaters who infest my front garden on any other night than October 31st.

Now that you've got this start, you could actually take it further - edit this piece down to about 20-30s for the intro and then go with a series about a group of Ghosts, Ghouls and other such Hallowe'en fixtures, like Vampires, Mummies, Werewolves and anything else that comes to mind to fit the bill.

I'm sure you could come up with some sort of series based around them. The joy about this is that they don't have to be released just at Halowe'en, you can release all year and come up with a Halowe'en special, which is the big piece of the year for you.

Might need some voice acting if you're going down that route though.

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Voodoo responds:

I did base the character off casper, and boo berry.

LOLS.

[Father & Son In: Trip]

You'll get there

I think that you've got potential, so keep at it. The piece is quite bold, with the plotline and the relativly little experience you have at Flash. I think that you could have fleshed out some of the plot points, like the Archery and the Bonfire lighting, for example.

The graphics will come to you eventually - I'd suggest that you use a slightly more orangey pink for the facial colours, as it looks too much like a pig at the moment to make it believable. I know it's a cartoon, but that's an important part as well. Investing in a tablet would also be a great way to deal with some of the issues with the rougher edges on your outlines.

The last thing I would suggest is that you play your sounds back, in order to check them for quality - when the father said NO!, it was full of static, as you were either being too loud into the mic, or you were too close to it.

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[PreloaderTest]

Way too big

Now this might be a decent preloader, but you've got to consider how big it is - 9.6 Megabytes is huge for a preloader. Generally preloaders tend to be in the order of 100-150kB, as it's just not the main part of an animation.

Making it smaller would cost you some quality, so you have to consider how this will affect your flash.

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Thracian responds:

The preloader itself is just 40kB, pumped up for testing. Didn't thought it would pass.

[Sentry- 1]

A decent start

I think that with practice, your animating style can come on. Did you use your mouse or a graphics tablet to make this? I will assume that you used a mouse, due to the way it looks. If so, invest in a tablet and the drawing will improve almost instantly. Try zooming in a little more and using a smaller tool to draw with - this will improve the detail.

The plot isn't too bad, but I think that it needs to be fleshed out a little more, just give some more detail into the scouting mission, what the base is doing on that rock, are they scouts, a mining colony, or something else?

Finally, the sound effects could be improved slightly - try to get the sound effects down to the same level as the voices, so when you activate some of the sounds, they do sound a little on the loud side.

A good start, I look forward to part 2.

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SCUD14 responds:

Mouse, a little too sensetive but i can't figure out how to tone it down.

What i ended up doing was drawing the character outlines in a large brush, and zooming in for the details. Won't do again.

Backstory, I have a plan for. Thanks for saying.

Lastly, i'll be getting a graphics tablet for christmas. Then i'll start part 2. =D

[Where ISN'T my mind?]

Very short

I can certainly see where you're coming from with making the musical notes sound like the singing and using the subtitles to get it working nicely. Other than that, I think that you're slightly missing the point, as it's way too short to really mean anything.

The animation looks quite simplistic, which is a shame, as it was getting reasonably effective, until I saw how short the piece was.

If you expand upon the start of this hypothesis of a flash, you'll have a really good piece, which would impress lots of people, I'm sure.

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[:Mush:]

Some potential here

It's not a bad group of unfinished animations. I could certainly see you taking the one with "Take on me" as the music, where this guy comes out of the book and meets the girl, a little further. It's a nice little piece and I think that you could just use a little more plot and patience to make it a good flash. Possibly some colour as well, but let's not go crazy.

I like that you've thrown some random stuff in, as while they aren't all good, it gives us a little something to all pick at and maybe give you some inspiration. When you made the ending of the flash, I would suggest that you get a better TV Static sound file, as it doesn't loop very well - needs to be about 10-15 seconds long, as when you hear the repeating of the bad loop like machine gun fire, it does bring the quality down.

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[The Dot Of Excellence 3]

If you feel so guilty

Then why do you bother to keep putting this stuff here?! You haven't come up with a plot, but you have managed to find a decent tune on the audio portal to present. It's a shame that the artist there has to put up with your flash attached to his piece, as you've put no effort in, when he has spent a good amount of time on it.

Less effort than the Adolf Hitler Pokemon flash, which is going a long way. Your drawing style is frankly appalling and you really could use some more practice with your drawing tools - more zoom in and then using a smaller tool. This would give you a better looking image, as when you zoom back out, there would appear to be more detail. Trust me, it works!

I've seen Wegra Adventures as well, I know you can animate, so take it further. Download some tutorials and learn how to manipulate your images better and prove to us that a little effort can yield a big result.

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Wegra responds:

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[Wegra Adventure 6]

Please put more effort in.

Okay, so we've got some music added to the piece, which is nice - plenty of ambient themes out there in the Audio Portal will help you come back with something Musak style for when Wegra goes to the Apple offices.

Still, your drawing style is embarrasing - you really need to get a job, so that you can afford to buy a graphics tablet. If you went that far, you would be able to draw better quality images and the flash that you make would be so much better because of them.

I think that you also need to put some effort into the plotline - it's actually getting there, as you've got the equation sorted: Scenario + Plot Device = Plot. The scenario here being the getting a job, the plot device being the money to get the computer and pencil, while the plot doesn't exactly shine through, but it is at least detectable.

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