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Too short

Well, it's a decent animation, but you really do need to work on the following points:

1) Subtitles - you're having the words appear adjacent to the characters that speak them. We can hear them loud and clear, plus the lip sync isn't all that bad. Perhaps try something that makes them look more uniform. I'd suggest the traditional black bar and nice, easily readable typeface that makes the piece look professional.

2) Plot - it's a little short. Some buildup to the scene might be needed, like having the bartender serving another customer, the juke box playing in the background, a few snippets of conversation taking up those big, awkward silences that you've currently got. Then have him approach the guy and ask the question.

3) I'm not sure why you put that Electromagnetism gag in at the end,but it's reasonably funny - it kind of reminds me of Monty Python, with the way that the crosses the fourth wall. Steps like this work, but it would be a nicer setup if it was an easter egg - hide a button somewhere in the flash, which would launch that scene.

I look forward to seeing how your pieces improve.

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[$100 and an Agoraphobic]

Good comedy

Well, that's a piece of claymation that actually grabbed my attention. I've got to say that you can do better with it, but for a first try, you're onto something here!

Perhaps more work could be done with the lip-synching and making sure that the camera stays in the same place for every shot in a scene - something that's particularly prevailent early on, but is seems to clear up towards the end.

I'd suggest that for research purposes, you look up Knox - he was the best stop motion animator in the NG community back in '04 and '05, but he's starting to make a comeback. Notice how he gets away without using lip sync, by making hcaracters without mouths - you could do similar, but perhaps have mounted mouths that get stuck in place with pieces of cocktail sticks, or something, just to add a dab of finesse to the project.

The writing is good stuff and I'd perhaps suggest that you extend it slightly, by getting the two pink dudes to hop into a toy car, or something, so that they can go and get the materials needed, rather than just having a cut-scene which doesn't really involve them moving much and a calculator suddenly appearing, for example.

So at the end of the day, it's a little rough around the edges, but it's a good start. Smooth animation comes with practice. If the models start to disintegrate, perhaps stick them in the fridge for a while and wash your hands, so that there is less oil on them, which makes the clay work easier - you don't need that.

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[Master_Light [Box-Killa]]

A little short, but not bad.

I think that there are some positives to take away from this piece - the pace is good, almost perfectly synced with the piano, though with the speed that SessileNomad encouraged in some of the parts, you'd be hard pushed to recognise if you were out of time there, I feel.

I'm not too pleased with how short the piece itself is - you'd be much more capable of making a flash that had a duration of closer to 2 minutes. The animation style requires a little more finesse and presentation, because it's just squiggles. I'm not wanting to sound harsh, but that's all you've got there at present. Taking it forward would have some of these squiggles coming together and dancing, forming images that move about the page and give the viewer something amazing to behold.

This next step could be crucial to the development of future projects of yours and I'm confident that you can take this further, with some of SessileNomad's more adventurous pieces, or, dare I say it, your own.

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[I'll Sue Ya!]

Perfect!

Well, we knew it was going to come to Newgrounds sooner or later and you did not disappoint - the video quality may be down slightly from the Lynwood CD, but then that would probably be about 50mb of file, so people would wait an age (relatively) to watch it on here. Perhaps in the future, an HD version will creep on when broadband speeds become good enough to cope with it, who's to say?

The gags in here are brilliant, especially the Tom Morello style guitar, stating "Arm the Lawyers". I love the way that you've portrayed Al himself as the main character in the song and having all of the things in there actually happen to him. The sad thing is, I can actually see some people in this world being dense enough to do something that silly and then try to blame others for their downfall.

It is very clear that you spent an absolute age getting this piece right - the number of fine details that you've paid attention to, such as the cigarette lighters' flames moving independently of the sway (I think you could have made them flicker a little more, but that's probably asking too much of you there!)

Even the credits are tied in nicely with the piece - I was expecting a little polka, or something else of Al's when we got to the end, but you probably would have had to cut something like that for time, or space, which is a shame.

I look forward eagerly to more of your works.

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pyropymp responds:

Extensive, thoughtful review + constructive criticisms! Every decent newgrounds contributor should deserve no less! Thank you!

[Light_Force [Box-Killa]]

Not bad, but could do better

Right, from the start of this piece, I think that you almost hit it, but there were a couple of issues, namely that the introduction 'fell off' the side of the screen, making it look like 'welcom' in the first few frames.

I think that it's a decent start and perhaps you can progress on towards more advanced pieces now, combining two or more colours in each shot, when they do things that make images that are distinctly multi-coloured. I would recommend that you zoom in and use a smaller tool, so that you get more control over the images that you're making.

I'd have suggested more 'firework' style imagery, where a sphere of light heads into the middle of the screen and explodes, with the sparkles getting gradually smaller and fading out as they burn out. Perhaps this could be some sort of explosion, representing more pictures, with the points of light exploding to become lines of images painted on the black background.

Well, that should give you some good inspiration and direction to do your great pieces of music justice with!

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Box-Killa responds:

damn it, it is because you have forced size.

[Draining the Lizard...]

Very funny :)

I think that the main issue with this piece is the lack of Newgrounds Paraphernalia on it could lead to people questioning the origins, but I'm sure that it's cool. A quick introduction of a Newgrounds icon would be simple for someone of your skill and talent.

It's a great tune that you've chosen to animate here and you've certainly gone to town with your animating style, which is brilliant. I love the way that you've put things in the piece that are symbolic of various internet rumours, facts and other sorts of here say. The credits are great, with the "Animal House" style summaries of how the main characters have panned out since the film was made. I do wish that you had decided to credit Rincewind, since I noticed him there as well, as we all know that Pratchett is a much better author than Rowling ;)

All in all, I love this piece and I'm looking forward to the next one that you make.

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TmsT responds:

I only credited the non-fictional people playing the characters (which is why I didn't credit Lupin, since he was represented by a CG werewolf). I know David Jason has played Rincewind in a TV adaptation recently, but he doesn't look like the Rincewind that the books and games portray, so I didn't caricature him for this. ;p
Look for the easter egg - there's a couple of nods to Terry Pratchett there.

[Extremely Drastic Measure]

Awesome!

Incredible buildup, a great gag and a very smooth piece of animation, this is certainly something that deserves to be given a chance to come forth and strut it's stuff.

Perhaps it could have done with the other people in the piece coming forward and dancing as well, adding a new dimension to the piece and, I don't know, maybe even some zombies outside, as the pan out shot happens. Personally, I'd have have a zombie or two looking at the town hall and then grunt or groan questioningly, before starting to dance in a broken fashion. Taking this slightly further, you could have one of the ravers open the door and slot them, but I think I'm getting distracted from the point.

It's a great piece, well drawn and animated, but I'd have made the town hall look a little less 'clean cut' with some of the edges rounded by weathering over the years.

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47times responds:

Thanks for the review.
I was gonna have the whole audience raving and it would have had other jokes, but I had to cut it short because it's homework and the due date is quite soon.

[LL - Banday]

Not bad

I saw the joke coming, but it could have been a little longer, to be honest.

You've got some good skills for creating and manipulating the animation, so well done with that. I like that you found the most masculine sounding voice you could for Coffee to make it sound even more weird for Strawberry.

I think that extrapolating the plot is your biggest goal here - if you manage to take the piece further, then you could have had Strawberry scream, then still proposition Coffee, who could have just dropped the panties and gone "oh hell yeah", before you launched the "end" screen.

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shaka-zulu responds:

Originally it was going to end with a rape scene loop but between studying, exams and getting unbanned asap I really wasn't bothered going the extra mile.