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[Dwelling at the Ocean's Bottom]

Nice work

I think that the soft pieces that you introduce the piano with are really skillfully constructed and you've certainly given a slow and somewhat sad opening to the piece.

The way that you blended a more jovial tempo into it later on might be there to signify a better feel of rebirth / moving on from the potential sadness or tragedy at the beginning of the piece. I like how it plays out, but in this context, I think it could be a little longer, just to dwell on the happiness or hope a little more.

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Jabicho responds:

Thanks for saying that! I think the piece could have a lot of different parts and be longer, so I'm already working on a piece that joins my three last pieces to make it more complete.

Thanks for writing!

[[herd] A Look At The World]

Melodic and slightly mournful

I can see this track starting to build up towards more of a happy sounding beat, but there is a certain degree of mournful sounding backing from the piano here, that makes you stop and think, but conjuring up a very nice sounding melody to it, you've given us a greatly insightful piece that really does convey a great deal of emotion.

With how everything settles down, there is a great deal of musical inspiration and the piano does belnd in nicely with the rest of the track in the counter melody and the beat that you've constructed. With this, I might suggest some sort of a solo from the counter, since the piano's power might drown out this too much.

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Herdunculus responds:

Great advice. I will try that in my newer version of this song. Although the way you say it makes me look like I know lots about structure and all that, but I don't =/ I think I can figure out what you mean though lol. Thanks a lot.

[On This Dark Day]

Quite a nice buildup

I can see this piece being used for one of those epic Final Fantasy style ending pieces, where the final battle between the protagonists approaches and a massively earth-shattering secret is betrayed, turning the main character's world upside down and making him question his conscience and purpose.

You've made a great beat and have accompanied this with an epic sounding melody that's almost a synthetic harpsichord in places. Perhaps for the epic quality of the piece, you could have made it a little longer, but without that, you will find that there is a certain something that makes this piece very playable and draws in more than a few listeners, just out of curiosity.

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[TTC the crowning (adagio)]

Still needs polishing.

Regarding your comments in response to the last review I left for a piece of yours, I view it as relevant to say to you that this piece, as do any of yours, requires more than 24 hours work on it.

As a writer, I can understand how writer's block can affect you and you do need to make the next step in revisiting the piece and listening to it, much in the same way that a writer proof reads it. Overall, the sound quality is good, but I would hate to see it spoiled, due to a few notes that are just a split second mistimed or sharp / flat. If you keep telling me that they are intentional, your conceited viewpoint needs no critique and none of us can help you at all.

I understand that these pieces do take a lot of talent to create and they do largely sound very nice, but there is something in there that makes me feel that they would sound even better if they had more of a loving, caring touch to the finishing - it is as if you have drawn a picture, but not given us the colour, such is the defecit here in one or two places.

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Calamaistr responds:

The color changes per person.

I know some of my work can improve by adding more melodies sometimes, or just more notes.
But thats for the listener to fill in, i like to leave space and am often satisfied without the maximum possibility's executed.

As far as 'split second timing' i sometimes do that to make the piece slightly more realistic, if everything was right on the milisecond it would become more synthetic while i like the accoustic.

I dont understand wholly what you mean with sharp/flat. (perhaps the strenght of the tone?), im having a little difficulty keeping both the volume up and remaining a soft sound of key, and whenever i turn the knobs of some options i never end up with what i want so i usually just do it by turning the volume of the piano to the max. and then turning the volume of the keys in the pattern down halfway.

[African_Jazz [Box-Killa]]

Not jazz...

But still, it's a pretty good tune. You've got too much pace and bass for what I'd call a jazz style tune. I think that there's definite potential there, especially when you consider the awesomeness of the saxophone solo that you've put in there.

I think that there is room for other improvement - perhaps borrow from similar genres to jazz, like reggae, since you can take some slower, equally powerful riffs and put them in ahead of the faster ones, which I feel detracts from the jazz itself.

More practice will get you there, so don't give up.

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Box-Killa responds:

yeah i made this song about a year ago so I have improved lol

[[dB] Conspirators]

A little short

Okay, the creepy sounding backing for the track is there, complete with the way that the industrial sounding overlay sounded like it belonged there. I think that you were just getting started with the main melody, but then you stopped it.

Still, with the way that everything was panning out, this Work in Progress was starting to take shape nicely, so we will enjoy hearing what else you decide to attach to it, to make a finished piece.

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Decibel responds:

If you liked it, appareently, why did you give it such a mediocre score,.
Well w/e thx for the review :D
>DJ<

[AF - Simply Sabotaged (Final)]

Good work

A shame about the long pause at about 5 minutes, since it kind of broke the track up into 2 different tunes, which did detract from the artistic nature of the piece itself. With how you've worked it, it does sound very accomplished and artistic.

I would suggest on a personal note that you don't advertise your contact details so readily on this site - you never know who is watching. It takes seconds to write your email address or screen name in a PM to someone, so it will help your security that way :)

As the track works, it has some great progressive beats and melodies that bring the track to life, with the way that everything blends together, I think the only real thing it lacks is a bass solo, in all honesty.

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aliaspharow responds:

mhm, thanks for the tips! Keep up with the helpful reviews my freind!

[[AL] Submarine attack!]

Very interesting

I think that you've gone beyond the submarine here - it's more like someone that has gone outside the airlock in a wetsuit and is diving amongst a naval graveyard. Old ships, rusting and decayed, populated sparsely with marine wildlife. Perhaps a few vestiges of a coral reef starting to take its place there and return the machine to mother nature.

I like the tranquillity and the ferocity that you've managed to convey - the ambivalence is incredible and the way that everything seems to fit together so well is really nicely created. I just hope that someone could come along and create a flash to show what I'm thinking here, since it needs to be done.

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ChampionAnwar responds:

I've never really thought of it in that context, I'm glad you liked it. Thank you very much for the review, I hope in time it does happen too. *fingers crossed*, who knows? :D Thanks again.

[4x4 Tea Party]

Requesting delivery of a melody STAT!

Sorry, but a collection of beats isn't going to get you anywhere, not even on the rave scene, as you need something to give the beat purpose. As the piece currently stands, there is a good selection of beats that you've put together, but it is like a modelling kit. You can see the pieces, but you haven't assembled it and there are no paints or stickers to use, so even if you did build it, you would be missing the detail.

I'm sure you can come up with some good detail in the melody that would suit a design brief of, say, a 4x4 commercial, so head back to the drawing board and work on it.

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[rooms are her travesty]

Starts well, peters out

I still think that you're trying to get too complex with the duets at the end of the pieces that you write. It works quite well in the early going, but when you're trying to have melody and counter melody, they must sound exactly right, which this sadly didn't, resulting in a slightly messy ending to a very promising piece.

I think that the piano is a wonderful instrument and you are becoming more accomplished with this all the time, but perhaps take a step backwards to get more used to some of the less technical, before you do the complex parts of your duets.

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Calamaistr responds:

sorry disagree with you there, ill never make simple music on the piano, i might add simple parts or simple keys but the music is supposed to represent what i feel at that moment in the music and it always has done so up till now, and as ive said before i dont make mistakes, i go over my music multiple times looking for parts that; in the whole' should be different.

So the final product is always as it should be, sometimes the real music isnt in the melody but in the whole, its a certain collection of complicated emotions that lock into eachother, as it concerns 'rooms are her travesty' that is exactly the matter. I purposely sew into eachother simple melodys and complex transitions, so that it eventually shifts into a whole different scene between each.
All the while keeping a guess on wether its sad or cheerful, and it can be interpeted as both.

No offence ofcourse but perhaps you try to be a bit to perfectionistic when listening to my work, if there is a mistake in my music it is a necaserry mistake. If there is piano falsa in my music, it is there to be noticed, and its there in relation to something else in my music.

Hope this helps.

p.s. another thing im not really 'becoming more accomplished' that much, ive made more complex melodies long before i started using fruityloops, they are simply to complex and to instrumentised (grand orchestra pretty much) to make in fruity loops in any short timeline and im not a very patient man, in fact im so unpatient i cannot handle making a piece in two different day.
Each and every track that ive made has not taken more than an hour max. to compose. The composition itself simply races after it has come to me. If i would sleep on it i lose the feel and thus the abillity to make the music. The one day i may feel like rehashing an old complex track in fruityloops, the other i cannot stand the thought. And they are simply to long to make in one day.

I usually play my music in my head, sadly i cant let anyone hear it. :)
Maybe if i find some more rest, some less stress.. i might.