Coop's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Last Hour: Chapter 9]

WTF?!

Seriously, is this the penultimate chapter in what we're seeing of this 'series'? You have the audacity to bring us a tantalising piece of animation that is probably worthy of more stars than this reviewer says. However, I'm just expressing my frustration at the lack of animation that we see here after a disgustingly long introduction.

What have you actually done in this scene? Bridged a gap between the laughably short scene 8 and the promising looking scene 10. I only hope that it is worth my time to watch and review that.

As I've said in practically all of my review for this story, it is maybe a 3 part series at best. I've been vindicated in these thoughts, as your scenes have not grown in length over the course and some of them are even shorter than the original ones.

Now that this series is drawing to a close, hopefully you can turn your attention to where you went wrong with this. I know you've won awards for this series, though so far I can't see why. Prove to me that you can do some decent animating, as your drawing skills have improved over time and I'm sure they will continue to do so. Why not try to make the next project a 1 part job that everyone can appreciate on the merits of the flash itself? If you struggle with Grammar, give me a private message, I'll be happy to help, as it's one of the things that you could certainly stand to improve on.

[Review Request Club]

[The Last Hour: Chapter 8]

Second verse, same as the first

Basic animation, devoid of plot, too quiet on the microphone work and unable to really releate to the rest of the project.

That's what I think we have hare in a nutshell, but please allow me to elaborate - there is no change of camera angles, or depth of the plotline. If you concentrated on showing us how these bits and pieces blend in together, you would be able to give us something that might actually be worthy of recognition. I'm a scriptwriter by trade on Newgrounds (well, a stat whore as well, but that's secondary, when you consider flash skills) and I think that if you worked on this, you would produce less, but vastly higher quality flash if you got a decent script laid out.

Try turning up the input volume of your microphone, as the sound effects are very quiet in this scene. We want to hear how menacing these creatures are, as they look like they should be terrifying. It's like one of the Disney huge monsters that speaks with a tiny squeaky voice - you can't help but laugh at them.

[Review Request Club]

[Jim: His Hidden Life]

Jimtopia - Manga Edition!

One of these great little pseudo plotlines that you could do with revisiting in one of the callbacks that you do during your Jim Day Flash - I'd love to see them visit the magical world of whimsy that this place on the other side of the portal became.

The effects of the newer animation were only dulled by the lack of voices, but now that you've got that sorted in the latest episodes, you're ready to come back to this place.

[Review Request Club]

[Forever Young]

Good work

I like that you've paid attention to the background and have really poured a lot of time and resporces into preparing a quality setting for the flash.

If I were in your position, I would have had the face on the egg rotate around horizontally, as it would look so much better, with the fact that the egg doesn't have to rotate so it's messed up in the box - though I note that you didn't do that.

A great delivery of the punchline and a well executed joke. I would have gone so far as to animate the credits - show the dead egg in the pan, throw in a few things like sausages and bacon, with names picked out in parts of the food, for example.

[Review Request Club]

[The Last Hour: Chapter 7]

Neds Animation

Why doesn't this piece have any animation? Okay, so maybe I'm being a little harsh on that token, as you've added the flickering of the screen, but there is nothing else, save from the intro, which I skipped, as I'm sure I've heard it all before.

Let's get the usuals out of the way first:

1) It needs to be longer - how else can we properly guage your skills as a writer / animator?

2)Consider adding more depth to the plot, which would make more scenes, but it would add a new dimension to the piece.

I'd also start hopping between camera angles, giving you a better presentation of the art - watch some movies with conversations in - the director uses a multitude of camera angles to get the shot he wants, so he can show it from all around the place. If you don't want to show the main bad guy's face, then it's fair enough. Give us a shot of his lackey by all means, so that we don't get bored during the show.

Also this is a step backwards on the lip-sync, as you don't seem to be interested in trying to improve it.

[Review Request Club]

[The Last Hour: Chapter 6]

Is that it?!

Man, the animation has greatly improved over the episodes, but I would say that you certainly need to work on a few other aspects of the piece to improve the overall quality of your production.

What I'll suggest (as always) is that you improve the length of the feature. Try drawing on the works of other users to see what sort of length the you should be aiming for.

I'd also say that I'm very grateful for the Skip option for the introduction - perhaps come back after the series is complete with a special edition , which is like a collector's edition boxed set - you know like certain companies do for their TV series.

Work on the lip sync - get shapes of the lips correct, rather than copping out for an elipse, as it will make that part of the flash look so much better.

[Review Request Club]

[Narrative Flash Remake]

Hmm

Not doubting the skills that you have as a poet, I still think that you've chosen the wrong approach to it all. I've written short stories and with a little tweak from Flash and a soundtrack, I could submit these stories here. It doesn't work.

What I would do to address that issue however, is to get a microphone. Read the poems out how you feel that they should sound, which gives you so much more to present to people.

With the style of background a little shadow play would help to put the listener into a real mind of the setting and would deliver a whole new dimension or two to your skills as an artist.

Keep working at it, there are a lot of positives to draw from your writing skills.

[Review Request Club]

SprintT responds:

Thank you mate, and I am sure that if you look at my previous this is 1000% better XD
I am slowly working twards using my 2 microphones but that will come later (maybe in the next idk)

[Do I eat the...? STWPT]

Needs more

The animation is good, but the sound quality lets you down. It's a little too much static for my liking, plus it's way too short to be taken seriously - you could ahve made this as a bytesize flash, which would have looked great on the Front Page of Newgrounds, but other than that, I'd say you need to make a longer flash to be looked upon as a serious animator.

A few tweaks here and there, and suddenly this flash looks better - build some things around this song. Have a guy talking to his friend "So, I've got this audition for a part in a commercial tomorrow." "What have you gotta do?" *Dances* "Well, that's lame." "Yeah, but it pays better than your paper route :P"

That's just something off the cuff, so play about with it and I'll be happy to comment on the results.

[Review Request Club]

Lazyfeet responds:

Yeah, this would be ace on front page. I have a feeling Tom Fulp doesn't like me all too much. I am sorry about the length, as I said it had to be exactly 10 seconds long and I though, well the collabs over but I can still submit it. I'm very glad I did because of the great response.

But yeah, thank you for the kind words, it's always nice to have some constructive criticism.

[The Last Hour: Chapter 5]

Nice additions

I like the skip button that you added at the start and the animated logo that you've provided - it cuts out a lot of the useless crap that you didn't need in previous episodes.

Now there is the case that the episodes are too short, but we can work on that, I suppose. I think that it is nice to know that any user can come in at any episode and start watching with an understanding.

Given that all of the Anti-Christ's followers wear these necklaces, it is a little strange to see the Anti-Pope's drawn wrongly - it defies gravity in the chain loop.

Try zooming in and using a better tool - that way, the imagery of the whole project will look much more detailed and you will have much better results, which would be more deserving of the awards that you have won.

[Review Request Club]

Jaiba responds:

my last movie of the season. this will redeem my movies i hope
check out chapter 10. it will more than make up for the quality of this movie.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /457202

[The Last Hour: Chapter 4]

Slow improvement

I think that you need to reflect on what has happened in this series so far. It's enough quality to be put together into something which would better represent an episode. This is just a little background plot, with two people talking and the whole introduction being far longer than any of the episodes we have seen.

As for the blowing of your own trumpet in the introduction, you need to lay off that - let your own work speak for itself, as the series is hardly legendary. You're improving, but you're not a legend yet - that has to be earned from people saying it about you, not you saying it about yourself in the hope that others believe you.

I'd suggest that you do two major things, other than increasing the length of the flash - the first is to move the mic further from your mouth when voice acting - this will reduce quality loss in the sound. The other one is much more subtle. Make the eyes of the guy on the right level, as it looks horrible.

If you're worried about your grammar, I'd be happy to look over the script for you, so just send me a PM on that. Blaming your Irish ancestry is no excuse for poor grammar. Someone to look over it can help, as it gives you a fresh perspective on it.

And the comment about the 56kers still out there as an excuse for why you are trying to keep the filesize so small... I don't buy it. Put Episodes 1-5 into one and then 6-9 in the second. Maybe as much as 3 episodes could be made once you've thinned out all of the introductions, which bulks up the filesize to start with.

[Review Request Club]

Jaiba responds:

check out chapter 10. it will more than make up for the quality of this movie.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /457202