Needs better sound
A good piece, with a well planned plot and a sensible progression. I would say that a few continuity errors crept in there, but aside from making nerds cringe, I don't think that you really made that much of a difference to the piece in all honesty.
I could do with a better quality copy of Monsters - you've got a 2 megabyte file, so there's plenty of space, without having to compress it. Have a look, to see what you can find, as it will improve the sound of the piece.
I'd have said that a few pieces needed to be amended - why did the woman dial "991"? When last I looked it was 911 or, for the benefit of the UK, three nines. These details make all the difference, as does the cop pulling up and standing in front of his car. Standard procedure means that they tend to use the car as a shield, so would probably do the same here.
When you emptied the spent rounds from the weapons, it looked great and really fit in with the piece, but the problem was that the revolver bullets were whole - the top part is the slug that gets fired. You need to draw a case without that part ;)
A little more work on drawing the car and perhaps the fingers of the cops looked a little too much like Salad Fingers in my eyes, but other than that, it was a good and ambitious piece.
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